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Felipe Musco |
Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 5:32 pm |
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Hey, you play Magic, too? Check out my new article there, I’ve written quite a piece of work this month, I think! |
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Felipe Musco |
Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 5:39 pm |
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corvus wrote:
1 BESIEGERS
1.1 History
Besiegers (First) turned up during the 7th edition (The Return of the King) and made quite an impression. They were one of the most popular shadows of their times as their abilities could counter many fp (Free Peoples) tactics (What abilities? What did they counter?). During the release of the 8th edition (Siege of Gondor), their strategy was enhanced as many powerful cards were added to their arsenal (Like...?). Reflections added 2 cards good enough for every Sauron shadow because of their ability (What cards? Why were they so good?). Finally, the 10th edition (Mount Doom) was the last set to expand (In which way? Did it expand the possibilities, or just the card pool?) the selecions for besiegers as the Sauron culture the way we know it, had finished its circle.
Your writing skills still need a little polishing. Check my comments in red, to see what I mean (and that’s just the intro). It’s MUCH improved since your last version, I’ll give you that, but that’s the trademark of an article written too fast. Now, even though you try to beef it up, it’s harder to make it come out nicely. I’ll wait to vote, so you can secure your 4, since right now, in my book, it still doesn’t deserve a 4, but OF COURSE it deserves more than a 3, and there’s no such thing as 3,5 or 3,8... |
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corvus |
Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 5:41 pm |
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Of cource, i’ll check it out tomorrow (altough i’m just an amature in MTG). Hope you enjoyed mine after the surgery... |
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Felipe Musco |
Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 5:56 pm |
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Yes, much better, as I said! |
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Gate Troll |
Posted: Mon Oct 16, 2006 7:17 pm |
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4. It wasn’t boring but it did seem like it belonged in the clinic.
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corvus |
Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2006 6:13 pm |
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Just made my final editings! I tried to formalize the style even more, and i think i cannot make it any better. I can only check for spelling errors, although i think i eliminated all of them.
So FM, is a 4 now possible? And how about you PW?
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sickofpalantirs |
Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2006 6:29 pm |
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I think PW already voted someone had better be able to give some good reasons to give thsi updated article a 3... |
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elf lvr |
Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2006 6:38 pm |
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I think a 3 was given before the article was updated. I’ve already given it a four, though... |
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Felipe Musco |
Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2006 6:45 pm |
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Hey, my 4 is already there! Nice job! |
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corvus |
Posted: Tue Oct 17, 2006 6:46 pm |
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Well, i thought he said he will wait, but hey, no big deal don’t worry about it. Thanks anyway. |
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