My friend, the work looks very professional!
Still has a small bunch of little text errors, so I hope this helps:
Main Deck:
-
Watchful Orc: "... each site on the adventure path
gains..." is wrong, it should be "gain" instead. See
Thorin's Harp as an example.
- Goblin Footman still doesn't include artifacts.
Mirkwood Pack:
- Elf Army: A little mistake at the end of this sentence, with punctuation: "...in archery fire and skirmishes until the regroup phase
. ."
Thorin Pack:
- Great Barricade: Lacks the "
fortification" keyword.
- The Arkenstone: "Take a card stacked here
into your hand." Or "into hand".
- Oakenshield: In the lore text, lacks a space between the comma and "wielding". "
rent,wielding".
-
Mithril Coat: Not a mistake but a possibility. If you make the first and second lines ("Bearer must..." and "Each minion...") join together as one, you'd free a line that might be used for lore text. Something like
"Cast off your old coat and put on this!", as Thorin says in the book.
I found these 3 quotes from the Hobbit book regarding the
Mithril Coat, if you wish to take a look:
[The] talk turned to the great hoard [of Smaug] itself and to the things that Thorin and Balin remembered. They wondered if they were still lying there unharmed in the hall below [the Lonely Mountain]:... coats of mail gilded and silvered and impenetrable; the necklace of Girion, Lord of Dale, made of five hundred emeralds green as grass, which he gave for the arming of his eldest son in a coat of dwarf-linked rings the like of which had never been made before, for it was wrought of pure silver to the power and strength of triple steel.
The Hobbit, Ch 12, Inside Information
'Mr. Baggins!' [Thorin] cried. 'Here is the first payment of your reward! Cast off your old coat and put on this!'
With that he put on Bilbo a small coat of mail, wrought for some young elf-prince long ago. It was of silver-steel which the elves call mithril, and with it went a belt of pearls and crystals. A light helm of figured leather, strengthened beneath with hoops of steel, and studded about the brim with white gems, was set upon the hobbit's head.
'I feel magnificent,' he thought; 'but I expect I look rather absurd. How they would laugh on the Hill at home. Still I wish there was a looking-glass handy!'
The Hobbit, Ch 12, Not At Home
"Bilbo Baggins!" [the Elvenking] said. "You are more worthy to wear the armour of elf-princes than many that have looked more comely in it. But I wonder if Thorin Oakenshield will see it so. I have more knowledge of dwarves in general than you have perhaps. I advise you to remain with us, and here you shall be honoured and thrice welcome."
The Hobbit, Ch 16, A Thief in the Night
Esgaroth Pack:
- Black Arrow: "
If Smaug is killed by a Bard's special ability" is slightly but importantly different than "
...killed by a special ability involving Bard": the first is triggered only by Bard's regroup ability and excudes the Black Arrow's skirmish one, while the latter includes each ability which spots or exerts Bard (NOT Iron-forged weapon). The Black Arrow's skirmish ability is much weaker than the regroup one, and requires Smaug to be skirmishing a Man, which may not happen often; that is meant to prevent the FP player from killing Smaug too easily before he deals his damage. But if that happened, I think the Black Arrow shold still remove Smaug from the game. If you support that idea, the second option should be used.
Wizard Pack:
-
Wizard Staff: Not an error, but a great change here! An Artifact, and vitality +1 instead of strength bonus. Nice!
-
The Eagles Are Coming: This one lack the part that allows an ally to fight. I believe you thought it was too much text, and that's a good possibility as the current version consists of 5 lines. But if we remove an unnecessary word like Dwarf in "
Dwarf companion" (the Eagles rescued Gandalf and Bilbo too), and if we use the first line with more text than just "Spell" (just like
Saruman's Snows and other
spells do), the resulting version might have 6 lines and still have a remaining line for lore text.
I believe it's important to make
Radagast a fighter in moments of need, as every other Pack has some ally fighting support (except Thráin, which has strong items); even Bilbo has Skillful Negociator (for Bard and Elrond).
- Current Version:
Eagles Are Coming
Event • Maneuver
Spell.
Exert Gandalf to play a
follower
from your draw deck or discard pile
and attach it to a Dwarf companion
(without paying the aid cost).
- Proposal:
The Eagles Are Coming
Event • Maneuver
Spell. Exert Gandalf to either play a
follower from your draw deck or discard
pile and attach it to a companion (without
paying the aid cost), or to allow a
ally
to participate in skirmishes until the
regroup phase.
That's all.